Sensory/Language

The Tiger Rising

"Her orange dress with the pink polka dots-glowing on the horizon"

"Sistine looked up at him with her tiny black eyes."

"The bag was heavy and it stunk"

"And then there was the crack of a gun."

It showing a lot more detail and it showed how the characters feel and they put a real good comflict. The problem is good also.

Sistine was wanting to free the tiger out of the cage but Rob was disagreeing saying that it doesn't belong to them, that it belongs to Beauchamp.